ANALYSIS OF ERRORS AND OMISSIONS IN CONTENT WRITING
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Brief Profile
Career Goals
Error Analysis
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Comments/ Type of errors The photo has been modified with ACDSee 10 Photo Manager to adapt it to the required pixel size. |
Version 1 – Draft version My name is Cristina Colella and I am Italian. I have a Bachelors degree in foreign languages from Roma Tre University where I studied English and Russian. I am going to enrol in a Masters degree in Translation and Interpretation UNINT (University of International Studies) in Rome to improve my abilities as a translator of legal documents, business and marketing related texts. Currently, I am translating for online newspapers and human rights associations to break language barriers and to make information more accessible. I usually translate from English and Russian into Italian and occasionally from Italian into English. |
Version 2 – Corrected version My name is Cristina Colella and I am Italian. I have a Bachelor’s degree in foreign languages from Roma Tre University where I studied English and Russian. I am going to enroll in a Master’s degree in Translation and Interpretation at UNINT (University of International Studies) in Rome to improve my abilities as a translator of legal documents, business and marketing related texts. Currently, I am translating for online newspapers and human rights associations to break language barriers, making information more accessible to speakers of different languages. I usually translate from English and Russian into Italian and occasionally from Italian into English. |
Comments/Types of errors Apostrophe needed after Bachelor. Spelling error: enroll. Apostrophe needed after Master. Preposition “at” needed before UNINT. Improvement in syntax. Added information to improve the structure and to give clarity. |
Career Goals
Version 1 – Draft version I have nurtured a strong interest in language learning from an early age. Language classes have always been my favourite ones in school. I was still a teenager when I decided that I wanted a career in languages. So I achieved a Bachelors degree in foreign languages in Rome. I studied English and Russian. Itwasatuniversitythat I discovered translation for the first time and since then I’ve been seeking opportunities to develop my skills. On my last year of university, I won a scholarship to spend three months in Moscow to study Russian at Moscow State University (MGU), where I attended a language course aimed at developing advanced level skills in reading, writing, listening and speaking. After my graduation, it wasn’t long before I realized I wanted to spend more time abroad to enhance my abilities. Hence, I decided to take a gap year and to work as an au pair in the UK where I attended advanced level Russia classes and started translating articles pro-bono for the online newspaper Cafébabel, subtitles for TED and web contents and reports for International Support – Human Rights.These activities gave me the opportunity to practice my language skills and improve my abilities as a translator as well as helping people in need, raising awareness on human rights violations. Later this year I’m going to enrol in translation related courses, to acquire more knowledge in this field. But at the same time, I am conscious that a translator needs to develop entrepreneurial skills as well, in order to succeed in creating a network of clients and their own brand. That is the reason why I would like to secure a traineeship in a translation agency. I believe this would give a chance to get feedback from senior translators and to understand the basics of project management and market research. |
Version 2 – Corrected version I have nurtured a strong interest in language learning from an early age. Language classes have always been my favourite ones in school. I was still a teenager when I decided that I wanted a career in languages, therefore I achieved a Bachelor’s degree in foreign languages in Rome. I studied English and Russian. It was at university that I discovered translation for the first time and since then I’ve been seeking opportunities to develop my skills in this field. On my last year of university, I won a scholarship to spend three months in Moscow in order to study Russian at Moscow State University (MGU), where I attended a language course aimed at developing advanced level skills in reading, writing, listening and speaking. After my graduation, it wasn’t long before I realized I wanted to spend more time abroad to enhance my abilities. Hence, I decided to take a gap year and to work as an au pair in the UK where I attended advanced level Russian classes and started translating on a pro-bono basis. I translated articles for the online newspaper Cafébabel, subtitles for TED, web content and reports for International Support – Human Rights. These activities gave me the opportunity to practice my language skills and improve my abilities as a translator as well as helping people in need, raising awareness on human rights violations. Later this year I’m going to enroll in translation related courses, to acquire more knowledge in this field. But at the same time, I am conscious that a translator needs to develop entrepreneurial skills as well in order to succeed in creating a network of clients and their own brand. That is the reason why I would like to secure a traineeship in a translation agency. I believe this would give me a chance to get feedback from senior translators and to understand the basics of project management and market research. |
Comments/Types of errors Comma added. Replaced “so” with “therefore” to make the sentence more formal. Apostrophe added after Bachelor. White spaces needed between words. Added information to give clarity. Improvement in syntax by replacing “to” with “in order to”. Double white space deleted. Spelling error: Russian. Improved syntax Conjunction replaced by a comma to improve syntax. Plural replaced with singular. White space needed after full stop. Spelling error: enroll. Comma is not needed. Pronoun added to improve sentence structure. |
Error Analysis
| Total Number of Source Text: 401 Total Number of Target Text: 420 Errors related to articles Errors related to punctuation, symbols, signs, spaces Omissions Spelling errors Choice of words Factual errors Choice of words and overall consistency of those words An eye for details Page layout and overall presentation Profile Photo Quality Additional comments if any Time taken to correct 401 words Time taken to prepare this evaluation report |
0 7 2 3 2 3 3 Needed more eye for details Not applicable here It took 4 minutes to crop and resize the photo, hence it would have taken 10 hours to modify 150 pictures. Some improvement in sentence structure has been done and new parts have been added to bring more clarity. 75 minutes 75 minutes |
