PROFESSIONAL PROFILE

Version-1 Draft version
Hi, I’m Simran Kaur Wadhon. I’m currently learning Japanese language from MOSAI Institute. I have completed my certification level and cleared level N5 of Japanese Language Proficiency Test in 2017. I have developed strong written and oral communication skills in Japanese language and would like to explore the analytical and business avenues offered through it.
Besides this, I’m also pursuing Japanese communication classes from Japan Foundation. To improve communication skills and increase my understanding of culture and tradition of Japan, I usually attend various events and screenings that are carried out in Japan
Foundation. Also, I watch anime and read mangas and regularly practice online to improve my grammar and vocabulary. Also I have a keen interest in music and I love to listen and sing japanese music.
I believe Modlingua would be a great platform to provide an environment, encouraging me to succeed and grow professionally and will help me to get a better understanding of the corporate world.
Would love to offer the best of my service to this prestigious organization.

Version-2  Corrected Version
Hi, I’m Simran Kaur Wadhon. I’m currently learning the Japanese language from MOSAI Institute. I have completed my certification level and cleared level N5 of Japanese Language Proficiency Test in 2017. I have developed strong written and oral communication skills in Japanese language and would like to explore the analytical and business avenues offered through it.
Besides this, I’m also pursuing Japanese communication classes from Japan Foundation. To improve communication skills and increase my understanding of culture and tradition of Japan, I usually attend various events and screenings that are carried out in Japan Foundation. Also, I watch anime and read mangas and regularly practice online to improve my grammar and vocabulary. Also,  I have a keen interest in music and I love to listen and sing japanese music.
I believe Modlingua would be a great platform to provide an environment, encouraging me to succeed and grow professionally and will help me to get a better understanding of the corporate world.
Would love to offer the best of my service to this prestigious organization.

Comments/ Types of errors
1. Requirement of "the" to highlight the topic.
2. Requirement of comma after "Also,".


CAREER GOALS

Version-1 Draft version
Since the school days I have been intrigued towards Japanese culture. Family friends, relatives would bring the gifts from the promising land which made me overwhelmed. I wanted to be a part of traditions and culture and more importantly, been able to speak the language. 
Embarked my journey towards Literature in English, forming a firm foundation to assess my possibilities to get deeper into the language. English always lend an aid for my creativity to outstand. Simultaneously I invested my time in learning and exploring Japanese through the renowned school of MOSAI.
During 2017, I decided to go ahead with N5 Level of Japanese Language Proficiency Test conducted all over the world and proudly, I could get through in one go. Achieving so, it helped me even more to dig deeper. While testing the waters, I figured I want to become an 
Interpreter. Not only a communication person but breaking the bridges such as career and culture advancement. I am excited to express, I am looking forward to appear in N3 Level of JLPT, this December. 
My dream is nurtures with the roads of experience. I would be delighted to be a part of your eminent organization to gain knowledge and grow in the Multilingual avenues. 
I look forward to become a successful interpreter and communication in a reputed Multinational Company. I believe hard work and research always pays off and I am willing to provide the most from my end, to contribute and benefit the organization.

Version-2 Corrected version
Since the school days I have been intrigued towards Japanese culture. Family friends, relatives would bring the gifts from the promising land which made me overwhelmed. I wanted to be a part of traditions and culture and more importantly, be able to speak the language. Embarked my journey towards Literature in English, forming a firm foundation to assess my possibilities to get deeper into the language. English always lend an aid for my creativity to outstand. Simultaneously I invested my time in learning and exploring Japanese through the renowned school of MOSAI.
During 2017, I decided to go ahead with N5 Level of Japanese Language Proficiency Test conducted all over the world and proudly, I could get through in one go. Achieving so, it helped me, even more,  to dig deeper. While testing the waters, I figured I want to become an Interpreter. Not only a communication person but breaking the bridges such as career and culture advancement. 
I am excited to express, I am looking forward to appear in N3 Level of JLPT, this December. 
My dream is nurture with the roads of experience. I would be delighted to be a part of your eminent organization to gain knowledge and grow in the Multilingual avenues. 
I look forward to become a successful interpreter and communication in a reputed Multinational Company. I believe hard work and research always pays off and I am willing to provide the most from my end, to contribute and benefit the organization.

Comments/ Types of errors
1. Correction of the tense form of 'be' from "been able" to "be able".
2. Requirement of comma after "it helped me, even more,".
3. Spelling mistake of "nurture".


ERROR ANALYSIS
Total Number of Source Target: 420
Total Number of Target Text: 421
Errors related to articles                                         0   
Errors related to punctuation, symbols,
signs, spaces                                                               3 
Spelling errors                                                           1
Choice of words                                                         0
Factual errors                                                             0  
Choice of words and over all consistency
of those words
An eye for details                                                      n/a
Page layout and over all presentation                  good
Profile photo quality                                                 n/a
Additional comments if any                                    none
Time taken to correct 420 words                           15minutes
Time taken to create this evaluation report        15minutes