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Assignment 1- Muskan Batra

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My name is Muskan Batra and I am 19 years old. Currently, I am a second year student of bachelors in Spanish at Department of Germanic and Romance Studies, Delhi University. I know English, Hindi , Spanish, Portuguese (basic written and spoken) and Punjabi (spoken).  Soon, I will be learning Mandarin as well. In this age of globalisation, we are not just citizens of our country, we are also global citizens which is why I wish learning many languages and with them learning about to new cultures. Also, I am pursuing a certificate course in Tour and Travel studies from India Gandhi National Open University. Being a firm supporter of children’s basic education, I am associated with The Rising People Welfare Foundation, an NGO, aimed at providing education to poor children apart from their school. Previously, I have worked with MASH Project, which is an organisation that helps the young social change makers bring the change in society, as an intern at events’ department.
 
I have always been fascinated by human psychology and have studied the same for 2 years in high school. It I has helped me in observing people and their actions and in applying basic psychological fundas to real life.
 
Being from an arts’ background, I want to expand my horizons to the commercial and the corporate world as well. This internship seems to be providing with many new things like project management, e-marketing etc. that I want to learn which surely are going to help me a lot in future.
 
 
MY CAREER GOALS
 
As a person, one of the major goals in my life is always to be a better version of myself. I have always believed that success always follows hard work. There is no shortcut to success and I have never feared working hard towards my goals and the issues that matter to me.
 
Also having the desire of learning new cultures, I have been a part of the delegation for a cultural exchange program with three schools in Italy in high school. I wish to explore those parts of the world which have not been explored yet, once I start earning.
 
 In the last year of my graduation, I am planning to give the DELE exam of B2 level for which I will be preparing soon for summer vacations along with this internship. Also, I am hoping to join a one program of Business Chinese.  After my graduation, I will be applying for jobs for further furnishing my Spanish.
 
Edited Version
 
My name is Muskan Batra and I am 19 years old. Currently, I am a second year student of bachelors in Spanish at Department of Germanic and Romance Studies, Delhi University. I know English, Hindi , Spanish, Portuguese (basic written and spoken) and Punjabi (spoken).  Soon, I will be learning Mandarin as well. In this age of globalisation, we are not just citizens of our country, we are also global citizens which is why I wish to learn many languages and with them learn about new cultures. Also, I am pursuing a certificate course in Tour and Travel studies from India Gandhi National Open University. Being a firm supporter of children’s basic education, I am associated with The Rising People Welfare Foundation, an NGO aimed at providing education to poor children apart from their school. Previously, I have worked with MASH Project, which is an organisation that helps the young social change makers bring the change in society, as an intern at events’ department.
 
Being from an arts’ background, I want to expand my horizons to the commercial and the corporate world as well. This internship seems to be providing with many new things like project management, e-marketing etc. that I want to learn which surely are going to help me a lot in future.
 
 
MY CAREER GOALS
 
As a person, one of the major goals in my life is always to be a better version of myself. I have always believed that success follows hard work. There is no shortcut to success and I have never feared working hard towards my goals and the issues that matter to me.
 
Also having the desire of learning new cultures, I have been a part of a delegation for a cultural exchange program with three schools in Italy in high school. I wish to explore those parts of the world which have not been explored yet, once I start earning.
 
In the last year of my graduation, I am planning to give the DELE exam of B2 level. Also, I am hoping to join a one year program of Business Chinese.  After my graduation, I will be applying for jobs for further furnishing my Spanish.
 
 
 

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In this age of globalisation, we are not just citizens of our country, we are also global citizens which is why I wish learning many languages and with them learning about to new cultures.
 
In this age of globalisation, we are not just citizens of our country, we are also global citizens which is why I wish to learn many languages and with them learn about new cultures.
I have always been fascinated by human psychology and have studied the same for 2 years in high school. It I has helped me in observing people and their actions and in applying basic psychological fundas to real life.
 
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Being a firm supporter of children’s basic education, I am associated with The Rising People Welfare Foundation, an NGO, aimed at providing education to poor children apart from their school Being a firm supporter of children’s basic education, I am associated with The Rising People Welfare Foundation, an NGO aimed at providing education to poor children apart from their school Punctuation
 
I have always believed that success always follows hard work
 
I have always believed that success follows hard work.
 
There is no shortcut to success and I have never feared working hard towards my goals and the issues that matter to me.
 
There is no shortcut to success and I have never feared working hard towards my goals.
 
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Also having the desire of learning new cultures, I have been a part of the delegation for a cultural exchange program with three schools in Italy in high school.
 
Also having the desire of learning new cultures, I have been a part of a delegation for a cultural exchange program with three schools in Italy, when I was in high school.
 
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In the last year of my graduation, I am planning to give the DELE exam of B2 level for which I will be preparing soon for my summer vacations along with this internship. Also, I am hoping to join a one program of Business Chinese.  After my graduation, I will be applying for jobs for further furnishing my Spanish.
 
 
In the last year of my graduation, I am planning to give the DELE exam of B2 level. Also, I am hoping to join a one year program of Business Chinese.  After my graduation, I will be applying for jobs for further furnishing my Spanish.
 
 
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